April 1, 2009
Dear Zeus,
Do you like people who bring joy,like to be happy,and try to make peace?Well I think you found the right person. I can do all those things and more to be the perfect match for Dionysus.
Let me tell you why I would make a good replacement for Dionysus. I am always happy. Ok well lets not over do it. I am usually happy. I love to make people laugh. For example when I sing to Mrs.Coombs in gym class it makes everyone laugh. They all sound like laughing hyenas. I just love making people be happy and being happy myself. For example one way I make people happy is make a product that they like called wine. For myself I just love having fun especially playing sports specifically basketball. Overall I love bringing joy to people and having fun.
Sincerely,
Lillian
Persuade Zeus
17 years ago
11 comments:
Lillian, I really like your opener and I like the way you compare the class to laughing hyenas.
Mrs. G
Lillian, I really like your opener and I like the way you compare the class to laughing hyenas.
Mrs. G
I like the simile They all sound like laughing hyenas. K.P.
To Lillian That is a GREAT letter to Zeus. It has a awesome opening, a strong middle and a great end. I think it was a really persuasive letter and you did a great job!
From,
T.L.R.
I thought it was really good and it was true.
It was really good.
SS
I agree with KP about the simile! S.N
Your letter made me laugh. You had all the building blocks of writing persuasively. Nice job.
Mrs. Gott
Lillian, I loved your opening paragraph, it really caught my attention. I also loved your simile. Your whole letter was true, especially about gym class, it makes me laugh so hard.
-SNM
Lillian (raisin)........
your letter was really fun to read. your voice really came out in it. you "bring joy" to me every day.
-MST:)
I thought that was a nice letter every thing you said in it was true that i know of! It had a very nice opening to it!
Britt
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