My Favorite Place
The Beach.
At the beach
I love swimming
I love laying
in the hot sun
listening to my
I-pod.
The way I feel
at the beach is
happy.
I smell salt water
all around me and
sand everywhere.
When I'm swimming
the waves are my
favorite activity to
do in the water.
It is fun
going under the waves.
It makes me feel
almost as happy as the day
my nephew was born.
Persuade Zeus
17 years ago
14 comments:
I can smell the salt water and sand.
Kevin
I like describes the smells of the beach, it was really good
milos
good job
anthony
It was very detailed for an exampile the part when you said you could smell the salt water all around you
Brittanie
Dear Sophia I love the way you wrote your poem it sounds great.
From Lillian
Sophia, that sounds fun. I would like to visit there sometime. -Tai
you wrote it so descriptive that I can taste and smell the salt water
good job!!!!
chandler
Sophie, the first paragraph started your poem really well. I like how you describe the way you feel and the smells around you. Great job!!
-Sarah
Sophie I really love the beach too!!!My favorite thing to do at the beach is swim in the water!When I'm at the beach I am happy also.I really liked your poem!!!
Jema
dear sophia I love the beach too. I like how you compared how happyy you were to when your nephew was born.
MAGNIFACIENT JOB SOPHIA
SEAN
Sophie.............
I liked reading your poem.My favorite part about it was when you said "I love laying in the hot sun" I could imagine that you were at the beach.
- Morrigan :)
p.s.I like jumping into the waves too. I think that its really fun!!!!
I liked the details you used about the beach. What is your favorite beach?
Kyle
I love the smell of salt water! Nice job Sophie! Love the poem!
-Super Shallon :D
I like way you describe the beach and the sallt water.
taylor
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