Sebago Lake State Park
Camping.
The Penny candy store
laffy taffy
skittles
razzles
all for pennies
out of my pocket.
Tubing
gliding across
the water
Feeling sand on
the beach
in between my toes
Smelling the BBQ's
Swinging on the swings
Swinging
High feeling the breeze go through my
Hair almost like I’m flying.
This is why I like going to
Sebago Lake State Park.
Persuade Zeus
17 years ago
14 comments:
I thought that it was cool. I didn't know that they had a Penny Candy Store.
C.H.
This poem was awesome to read I just couldn't stop reading it.
P.S. i read it twice
Dear Lillian
Thinking about all that candy make me want to go out and buy some right now!
That tubing sound like fun and i love the smell of BBQ!The swings sound great. I really like how you wrote about everything in a flowing way!
Great poem!
From,
Trenton
This is very detailed.I like the part when you say the candy is for a penny that is so cool!!!!
It was really good! I really liked how you wrote about the penny candy store.
Sophie
I liked your simile in the fifth paragraph. I love your first paragraph, it's very creative. I can really picture it. Good Job!!!!
-Sarah
Lillian I really like the way that you wrote it,it really matches Maria Testa's format of her writing!I felt like I was swinging on a swing when you described it!!You did a great job!
Jema
Candy for a penny! I've never heard of that. I can almost feel the sand.
Kevin
dear lillian I love camping to I like your descriptive writing like when you said "high feeling the breeze go through my hair almost like I'm flying.I also love water tubing.
SEAN WYMAN
your poem was very good, it flowed very nice. I want to go there sometime!
Milos
Lilly (Shelly)...........
WOW! In your poem you used a lot of the senses and that really made me want to read more. It was FABULOUS!!!!!!!!!
- Morrigan :)
p.s. now i really want some laffy taffy!!!
I like how you described the feelings and smells of Sebago Lake State Park.
Kyle
This poem was well Written!! It makes me want to go there now!! ( penny candy!!! :D )
-Super Shallon :D
Dear Lillian,
This is an AHHH-some poem. I remember when I went to your camp with you and this poem explains it very, very well. Your simile is really good. You give alot of good details to support why its the most beautiful place to you.
Sincerely,
Samantha :-}
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