Florida
Ahh, the fresh Linen smell of Florida
Miles of awesomeness every where you go
Palm Trees in sight
Memories have begun.
Beaches
Sand slithering between your toes
Splashing in the water
Can this get any better?
The Amusement parks
Sea-World, Universal, Islands of Adventure, Congo River
And seeing the sun settling
Seeing the Stars at night when you leave.
The Smell of a fresh grilled steak at a restaurant at night.
hearing the jazz music
Watching sports on the TV
just awesome.
Seeing family.
Hanging with my cousin Bobbi
Staying up till 5 in the morning
Drinking Kool-Aid
So much fun!
Leaving.
upsetting.
disappointing.
Makes me want to
Scream
At
The
World.
Well,
I'll just wait till next year!
-Shallon
Persuade Zeus
17 years ago
11 comments:
Shallon, I like how you described all of the different things to do. -Tai
i liked reading your poem, It was very well written
chandler
Shallon, I love the first paragraph, and how you say "the fresh Linen smell of Florida." I like how you use the word "slithering" in the second paragraph, it made it exciting. Your description of the restaurants
was awesome! It was so easy to follow, not a bit confusing. I love the last paragraph when you say you want to "scream at the world" and then you say you'll just wait untill next year. Great Job! It sounds like you have a lot of fun in Florida!
-Sarah
I kinda understand what you mean I go to a lake in Pennsylvania and I hate leaving. nice poem
Kevin
Shallon I can see the sun setting and the stars at night in my head.Florida sounds like a really fun place!!!Great job!!
Jema
Great job Shallon after I read this I want to go to florida. I love the Dascriptive words it makes your writing come to life.
SEAN
very good poem. I had to keep on reading!
Milos
shallen the way you descibe folorida is aswsome the sand on the beachs between you toes the amusement packs and smellof steak yum. anthony
Shallon........
I like the word you used and the beginning. Awesomeness.
I also like when you said "Seeing the Stars at night when you leave." I can really picture that in my head.
- Morrigan :)
This sounds like a very fun place to be. I also liked how you started the poem with ahh!
Brittanie:>
I loved how you described the fresh linen smell and the awesomeness everywhere you go, it was a really good description of the smell. -Sophie
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