Boston
The most wonderful place in New England
Boston.
The Red Sox Stadium
the scent of the hot dogs
pulls you closer and closer
the delicious 8 inch
hot dogs
taste better
than the hot dogs from home.
Then, once the game
starts
the rumbling of the
crowd begins,
and by the 6th inning
I can already taste
the fresh breath of
a win.
After the game
it takes almost
forever to get to the T.
Once we get on the T it feels like it only takes
1 second
to get back to the train station
Here we catch our train home
to Portland.
Persuade Zeus
17 years ago
15 comments:
I really can smell and taste the Fenway Franks.I know what you mean train rides in Boston are fast.
Kevin
Sean, I thought the parts about the time it took to get to the T and to the train station were very descriptive. -Tai
You made me hungry with your descriptive writing
chandler
Sean, your first paragraph was very descriptive, it made me want to keep reading. I like how you describe the rumbling of the crowd and that by the six inning you can already taste the fresh breathe of a win. That part was extremely creative, I liked it a lot. Your whole poem was fantastic!!
-Sarah
I liked how in the second paragraph you said "Then, once the game starts the rumbling of the crowd begins" that was a really good description of the crowd.
-Sophie
dear Sean,
nice poem. You were very descriptive about your hot dogs. Your poem
sounds great!
From trenton
Sean, I liked the way you described the 8 inch hot dogs it made me want some.-Casie H.
Sean I can smell the hot dogs right now!I like the way you say "the rumbling of the crowd begins" because I can tell that they get really excited!
Jema
sean your letter is filled with detail the 8 inch long hot dogs the fresh breath of a win anthony
Those hot dogs sound good. This is a great poem
Milos
Sean.........
I liked it when you said "I can already taste the fresh breath of a win." I thought that was a really good way of telling us how you felt.
Good Job!
- Morrigan :)
That was a very good poem you wrote. I liked how you talked about the hot dogs. It was very detailed.
Brittanie:>
you have a good desripion of fenway park and you have a good flow.
trm
Dear Sean,
I love this poem so much. You used really good descriptive writing it was so good it knocked the breath out of me (in a good way). I love Boston too. You described it so good. Great Job!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Sincerely,
Samantha :-)
Wow, an 8 inch hot dog.
Kyle
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