BALD MOUNTAIN
The most beautiful place,
Bald Mountain
being on top feels like
being on top of the world.
two miles
we walk
up
and
up
and
up.
I see kayak paddles
spinning as fast as helicopter blades.
Rays of sun streak down,
the water glistens.
My nose fills with the smell
of pine
from the trees around me.
The most beautiful
place
Bald Mountain
Persuade Zeus
17 years ago
11 comments:
Sam that sounds like a very relaxing place to be and a nice place to go sometime. -Tai
this poem is very descriptive, good job sam
chandler
Sam, that was AWESOME! I loved when you said "being on top feels like being on top of the world." I also like how you wrote up and up
and up. Saying the kayak paddles spin as fast as helicopter blades was very creative. You described it very well, it sounds like a very
calm and serene place. Outstanding Job!!!!
-Sarah:)
I can smell the pine. nice simile.
Kevin
dear sam I like your simily
and what bald m.t. feals like once you reach the top.
SPECTACULAR JOB
SEAN
Very nice simile! And that walk must be tireing.
Milos
sam bold mountain seems really fun place too go and the top seems so cool and kayakers paddling seems cool.anthony
Sam.........
I like how you said "being on top feels like being on top of the world." I can imagine you on top of the mountain very clearly.
GREAT WORK SAM!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
-Morrigan :)
This was a very detailed poem. Like the part were you say I see kayak paddles
spinning as fast as helicopter blades.That was very cool.
Brittanie:>
Sam Bald Mountain seems like an excellent place to be!!The walk must be worth it to see the beautiful surroundings!!!
Jema
I really liked your simile. I also liked how you put up,up,up. -Sophie
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